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This is the first meeting with Axel on the beach. If you want to enjoy the event for the first time with graphics and other coolness -- please wait till the update to see what happens. If you want to help with the writing please read the artist’s comment for instructions.



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OP-KH-DS

--Axel Beach Meeting--

By: OP

Notes:

Summary of what happens……
Axel adducts the player, parody for KH2 when Axel adducts Kairi. The player doesn’t

realize it’s a student at first. Under certain options, Cloud will come and save the

player. The player then has the choice to leave with Cloud or Axel.


=-= Begin Event =-=

Player:
Where am I?

(player finds herself alone on the beach. Screen suddenly blacks out)

Player: *GASP* who...?! (I can’t get loose!)

???:
Oh dear, dear. Little girls shouldn’t take to sleeping in odd places. You never know

what could get hungry ...and girls are practically tempting in flavor <3

This is deep trouble, I have to act fast!


A. Talk your way out! (scroll down to section A)
B. Scream for help!!!   (Scroll down to section B)
C. Fight! Kick him where it hurts! (Scroll down to section C)


==============Section A. Talk your way out!  ===========================

Player:

#1. How about letting me go?
#2. Hey!! What’s over there?!
#3. Please don’t eat me! I don’t taste good even with ketchup!!

--------------#1. How about letting me go? -------------------------------------

???: Oh? Where’s the fun in that?


I. I’ll give you something in return~
II. Forget this, Scream for help!
III. Kick the Jerk! Kick him hard!!


~~~~~~~~~I. I’ll give you something in return~ ~~~~~~~~~

???: Oh? A compromise, I could live with that? But what do you have that I could

possibly want?

a. My lunch money!
b. A favor.
c. A kiss <3
d. A kick!

////// a. My lunch money! //////

???: Hahahaha!!

(Screen comes backs in)

???: Aw come on, give me a bit more credit. I’m not some school yard bully.

Player: What are you then?

???: I am the “Axel”, commit that to memory. You’d do well sticking by me, I’ll at

least keep you from nodding off on beaches. But knowing me comes with perks <3 You’ll

know soon enough :3

i. Thanks, but no thanks.
ii. Alright, I’ll see you around school.
iii. Um... can you show me the way to school?


***i. Thanks, but no thanks.***
Axel: Tsk tsk. What a shame. Here I thought we were having fun. You really don't know

what you'll be missing... (Axel leaves)
Character: Who WAS that guy....?
*ENDS*

***ii. Alright, I’ll see you around school.***
Axel: Yeah, sure. See ya~ (wink, leave)
Character: What a weird person...
*ENDS*

***iii. Um... can you show me the way to school?***
Axel: Well um... I'd love to, but...

Axel: actually I have a very improtant date with destiny which happens to... "conflict"

with the hours of first period.

Axel: So~ I think you're on your own~!

Character: (sigh) Go figure.

Axel: (grin) Well... maybe~~ I can get ya there. I'm not heartless after all :3 But

after that I really must meet with destiny.
*ENDS*


////// b. A favor! //////

(Screen comes backs in)

???: Oh? Are you sure about that? I could make you do all my homework… or have you make

my lunches for a year… or make you my personal lackey.

i. I wasn’t thinking about that kind of favor…
ii. Uh… sure. As long as I can get to school.
iii. COOL! Can I really be your lackey? I can make cupcakes!


*** i. I wasn’t thinking about that kind of favor… ***

???: Oh really? *grin* Well exactly what were you considering? There couldn't be

anything dirty going on behind those sweet eyes, could there?

Player: o///o Er actually... I was thinking more like an 'I owe you one.'

???: Oh really? How boring~ *sigh*

???: But I guess it can't be helped. I'm not one to take advantage of poor young girls

after all.

Player: Right... I'll just be going to  school now.

???: Don't think you've gotten rid of me. You owe me. I'll see ya at school. Oh and

btw, it's Axel. Got it memorized?

*END*


*** ii. Uh… sure. As long as I can get to school.***

???: Oh? Alright then, just remember I'll call you up on that little favor.

Player: Um... I never got your name.

???: Oh, right. I'm Axel. Got it memorized?

Player: Uh, right. Can I go to school now?

Axel: All in good timing dear, I'll have you there safe and sound.

*END*





*** iii. iii. COOL! Can I really be your lackey? What do we do Boss? ***

???: Uh… well first don’t call me “Boss”, it’s Axel.

Player: Oh, okay!

Axel: ...and second, our mission is to get to school before the teacher realizes we’re

missing. Detention will only interfere with our plans!

Player: Alright! Uh… where is school? ^_^;

Axel: It’s a good thing I’m the “boss” here. Just follow me, I’ll be your tour guide <3

*ENDS*



////// c. A kiss <3 //////

(Screens comes back in)

???: Oh, you’re rather sly. I feel a little taken of advantage of… and here I thought

you to be an innocent, sweet girl on the beachside.

???: I’ll have to keep an eye out for you, you won’t get the better of Axel that

easily. I’ll see you at school, Later~~ <3

*ENDS*

////// d. A kick! //////
Go to section “C”


~~~~~~~~~~~~~II. Forget this, Scream for help! ~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Go to section “B”

~~~~~~~~~~~~~III. Kick the Jerk! Kick him hard!! ~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Go to section “C”



--------------#2. Hey What’s over there?! --------------------------------

???: Huh?

(screen comes back in, but Axel is not visible)

I. Now’s your chance KICK HIM and Run!

II. Hahahahaha, I can’t believe you looked.

III. Run for it, run fast!!

~~~~~~~~~~~~~I. Now’s your chance KICK HIM and Run!  ~~~~~~~~~~~~
**go to section C**

~~~~~~~~~~~~~II. Hahahahaha, I can’t believe you looked. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~


Axel: Aw, come on, that's not very nice to do to your new boyfriend!

Character: Wh-what?! I never agreed to that!

Axel: (smirk)

OPTIONS:
A. Um, what are you smirking about?!
B. I'm NOT your girlfriend! Creep! Go away!
C. Actually, fine then. I GUESS I'll be your girlfriend. Not like it matters anyways.


~~~~~~ A "Um, what are you smirking about?!~~~~~
Axel: The look on your FACE! (pointing at character with a grin)

Character: It's.. it's not that funny! I'm going to school now, and don't follow me!!

(Character leaves, as scene fades-out there is one final thought)

Character: What a strange person. I hope that everyone around here doesn't act like

that....


~~~~ B "I'm NOT your girlfriend! Creep! Go away! ~~~~
Axel: Oh, ouch, you really hit me where it hurt- right in the pit of my nonexistent

heart...

Character: You ARE weird! Leave me alone!

Axel: He-hey!! Don't run off now...

*END*


~~~ C "Actually, fine then. I GUESS I'll be your girlfriend. Not like it matters

anyways."~~~

Axel: Aw, whats with the long face~?

Character: Well, I mean, I just wanted to leave my options open until I got to know

some people around here, but you seem to have your own ideas and I ...well....

Axel: Whoa- don't start crying on me or anything. I guess I'll be on my way, then...

*END*




~~~~~~~~~~~~~III. Run for it, run fast!!  ~~~~~~~~~~~~~


???: H-hey, wait a moment! Don’t leave!
*END*


--------#3. Please don’t eat me! I don’t taste good even with ketchup!! --------

Axel: You seriously think I'd eat you?

Character: Wh-well, y-you sure seemed serious!

Axel: Heheh. You're kinda cute. Listen kid, I won't eat you, at least not today.

Character: Ah~~~ thank goodness.

Axel: C'mon. We're gonna be late for class, shorty. Better hurry up.

Character: Sh-sh-SHORTY?! UGH!

Axel: Hahaha better catch up, shorty~ <3

*END*










This is the End of section A






==============Section B. Scream for help!!! ===========================

Player: AHHHHHHHHH!!!! Someone help me!! Someone is kidnapping me!!! EEEEEEEEEE!!!!

???:
ACK!! Could you turn down the damsel gig! You do know I’m right here. There’s no need

to scream; I can hear you just fine.

Player: What?!

Young Guy: Let her go.

???:
Ah!

Ah… it’s not what it looks like!

Well… actually it is, but hear me out!

Young Guy: Obviously she doesn’t want to be apart of your scheme, and obviously you’re

scaring her. So let her go.

???:
Scheme? Such condemning words. I suppose it’s MY fault that the kitten likes napping

alone on beaches? I was just keeping her from the creeps.

(Cloud pushes Axel away and grabs the player)

???: ACK!!

(Screen is no longer black)

Young Guy: You hardly saved her then. (Cloud stern and ticked)

(player is standing close to Cloud)

???: H-Hey! I know I don’t have a clean record, but how am I a creep?

Young Guy: How are you not?

???: Well for example, I was going to escort the lovely lady to her proper place in

school for a bright education.

Of course I was trying to impart the wisdom of NOT nodding off in odd places, because

something like “that” could happen. How much more knightly can I be?

Player:

#1. You’re and idiot and a creep…

#2. You could have just said so...

#3. I don’t quite understand, but you’re from my school right?

#4. Are you guys friends?

#5. Thank you for saving me <3







--------------#1. You’re and idiot and a creep…----------------------------------

{PLEASE CONTINUE STORY}



--------------#2. You could have just said so...-------------------------------
{PLEASE CONTINUE STORY}



------#3. I don’t quite understand, but you’re from my school right?-----------

{PLEASE CONTINUE STORY or CHANGE OPTION}

--------------#4. Are you guys friends?----------------------------------------

???: Oh yes, Cloud and I are tied by the threads of fate.

Cloud: No, were not friends.

???:




I.
II.
III.


~~~~~~~~~~~~~I.~~~~~~~~~~~~~


~~~~~~~~~~~~~II. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~


~~~~~~~~~~~~~III. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~


--------------#5. Thank you for saving me <3--------------------------------


{PLEASE CONTINUE STORY}



End of section B


==============Section C.Fight! Kick him where it hurts! ====================

???: GAH

Eeeh-ch-ch-ch~... that was a... little low – Was that entirely necessary?

1. Don’t you think you earned it?
2. Well… you shouldn’t have grabbed me like that.
3. I’m sorry! Did I hurt you badly?
4. Jerk! *run away*

--------------1. Don’t you think you earned it?-------------------

???: C'mon, I'm not a bad guy.

Character: Then why are you out abducting girls?

???: I was trying to help you, give me a chance!!

Character: Well, whatever. Just help me get to school and we can forget about it. (go to B)


--------------2. Well… you shouldn’t have grabbed me like that.-----------------
???: All right, all right. Sorry.

Character: Anyways, I need to get to school. If you help me I'll forgive you.

???: Well don't you run a hard bargain?

Character: Well it's the least you can do!! You scared me me really badly...

(Go to i)

--------------3. I’m sorry! Did I hurt you badly?-------------------------

???: Ugh, a little!! Geez, you're pretty feisty. Maybe I should've left ya on your own. (turns to leave) I've gotta get going. I'll catch ya later.

a. Hmph, well maybe you should have.
b. No, wait! I have no idea how to get to school!!

--------------4. Jerk! *run away* -----------------------------

Character: (You turn tail and get the heck out of there!!)

???: Hey, wait!! (Alone)

???: (Stands up fully, grinning widely) Ah, well. Til' next time, cutie.

*ENDS*

-------------A. Hmph, well maybe you should have. -------------

???: (leaves)

*ENDS*

------------B. No, wait! I have no idea how to get to school!-------------

???: Well if you needed a guide you could've just asked! I see I was messing with the wrong person. I'm sure you can find it on your own.

i) Well I would have asked if you hadn't scared me!
ii Fine, I will find it on my own, jerk!! (Go back to A)

------------i) Well I would have asked if you hadn't scared me!-----------

???: Okay okay, sorry, don't get upset. So you need my help, eh?

Character: (embarrassed) Yes.

???: Well then I'm your guy, I know this place like the back of my hand! Name's Axel, commit it to memory. And uh, you need to get to the school, right?

(You nod)

Axel: Well I hope you're up for running, 'cause we're late!

I. Sure, I could run a marathon!!
II. I'm, not sure I can, my leg hurts.
III. Could we maybe just walk and, I dunno, talk a little?

-----------------I. Sure, I could run a marathon!!-------------

Axel: I hope you're right. (He grabs your hand) Let's go!!

*ENDS*

-----------------II. I'm, not sure I can, my leg hurts. -------------

Axel: Hmm, well that ain't good. I don't think either of us want to be late....

Got it!~ (Before you can react, you find yourself swept up into his arms as he starts running)

Character: This isn't what I had in mind!!

Axel: Well, it'll get us there at least a little faster than walking!

*ENDS*

------III. Could we maybe just walk and, I dunno, talk a little? -------------

Axel: (Looks surprised) Well, I guess so..

Character: Please? (You pull out the fool-proof ';puppy eyes';)

Axel: (Blushes) Ah.. okay... B-but it's your fault that we're late!

Character: Okay!

*ENDS*
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Author's Comments

Thank you everyone for the help! I've made some edits with the help of
:iconryugexu::iconsunrikaiya::iconzomgzadr::iconohshcroxmysoxoff:

There's still some more that needs to be added to finish it. Also if you think of some ways to improve what's already here, feel free to comment :)



This is the Event for Axel's first meeting at the beach. It's not quite done, so I would like you guys to help me finish and maybe edit it some to make it better. I'm sure you got some spiffy ideas in there :D



How can I help?

I wrote the main story frame, but not all the ends are tied up. You can leave a comment and write how you think the different story tracks should finish or continue. If you just have a simple idea but don't want to really write, just comment anyway. Maybe it'll inspire someone else to write the rest.

And guys... not all the stuff has to be epic. Look at how I've ended some of my events. Some are plain, some are funny, some hints at stuff to come. It doesn't have to be a novel.


When you do please write down which Section, and under which option you are talking about. Otherwise we'll just be confused @_@

(Example: Section B, option 1, option II )


To make it simple for you guys I wrote these notes where the writing is needed:

{PLEASE CONTINUE STORY}
{PLEASE CONTINUE END THE STORY}
{PLEASE CONTINUE STORY or CHANGE OPTION}




{PLEASE CONTINUE STORY}
This is where I stopped writing but it needs to continue. At these spots you can create new sets of options or just end the story. Whatever feels best.


{PLEASE END THE STORY}
These are where the story is already at options i, ii, and iii. I try to end the story at this point (to make it not too long). So at these places, just wrap it up to where the player ends up going to school ( with or without Axel depending on the circumstances)


{PLEASE CONTINUE STORY or CHANGE OPTION}
These options I'm not that crazy about. You if you have a different idea of what the player should say or do, write out a scenario for that. OR you can just continue the story if you like the option given.


How do I read this thing??!

I tried to make this as clear cut as possible. I think if you just keep reading it will make sense.

The event is divided into 3 sections A, B, C. These are the first options that player can choose from. Each of these options branch out into more options. The option after the first one is always 1,2,3.

When you "select" an option, scroll down till you see that option named again.

Example

1. go this way...
2. go that way


---------1. go this way... -----------------

this will continue with what happens if you "go this way".

--------2. go that way-----------------

If you "go that way" this is what happens.




the problem comes if when there's lots of writing and more options. You just have to keep scrolling down till you find the option title that matches the option you selected.

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:iconryugexu:
Here's my help.



***i. Thanks, but no thanks.***
Axel: Tsk tsk. What a shame. Here I thought we were having fun... (Axel leaves)
Character: Who WAS that guy....? (scene end)

***ii. Alright, I’ll see you around school.***
Axel: Yeah, sure. See ya~ (wink, leave)
Character: What a weird person... (scene end)

***iii. Um... can you show me the way to school?***
Axel: I'd love to, but I'm ditching today. So I think you're on your own~!
Character: (sigh) Go figure.
Axel: (grin) (scene end)

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<--- is so pale ghosts see her and say "DAMN THAT'S A PALE B*TCH"

Dwarven Vow # 351: If a man wears pink or purple, he is not to be trusted.
:iconblotchie:
cool!! i think i could help you with some of that!!
Axel seems to be my specialty n_n

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" Hi....I like nachos..and..frozen yogurt"
-fred fred burger

"MUSTERED! lets not be silly, limon, thats different.
- the mad hatter
:iconblotchie:
do you need help on axels art too?
or is someone already taking care of it?

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" Hi....I like nachos..and..frozen yogurt"
-fred fred burger

"MUSTERED! lets not be silly, limon, thats different.
- the mad hatter
:iconop-kingdomhearts-ds:
I think someone has already taken care of it... >_> but I'm not sure at the moment hehe ^_^;;

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Awesome! look to hear what you got :D

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:iconblotchie:
aww man... guess i was too late hu...i was really looking forward to it.

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" Hi....I like nachos..and..frozen yogurt"
-fred fred burger

"MUSTERED! lets not be silly, limon, thats different.
- the mad hatter
:iconop-kingdomhearts-ds:
Thank you! This is very helpful :D :D After awhile my brain gets so fizzed out and I can't think for 2 cents XD

Hmmm since Axel mentioned something about "benefits" maybe Axel should say something about like "you don't know what you're missing" but I really love the "tsk, tsk. What a shame." XD that sounds soo much like him :D

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Well if you want to draw some expressions for Axel that could be helpful for the artist drawing Axel :D

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:iconryugexu:
You know Axel, he wants to keep 'em guessing! XD I think of Axel like the Cheshire cat from Alice in wonderland- always smirking and scheming, and wants to lead you on because he thinks its so amusing!

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<--- is so pale ghosts see her and say "DAMN THAT'S A PALE B*TCH"

Dwarven Vow # 351: If a man wears pink or purple, he is not to be trusted.
:iconryugexu:
~~~~~~~~~~~~~II. Hahahahaha, I can’t believe you looked. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Axel: Aw, come on, that's not very nice to do to your new boyfriend!

Character: Wh-what?! I never agreed to that!

Axel: (smirk)

OPTIONS:
A. Um, what are you smirking about?!
B. I'm NOT your girlfriend! Creep! Go away!
C. Actually, fine then. I GUESS I'll be your girlfriend. Not like it matters anyways.


~~~~~~ A "Um, what are you smirking about?!~~~~~
Axel: The look on your FACE! (pointing at character with a grin)

Character: It's.. it's not that funny! I'm going to school now, and don't follow me!! (Character leaves, as scene fades-out there is one final thought)

Character: What a strange person. I hope that everyone around here doesn't act like that....


~~~~ B "I'm NOT your girlfriend! Creep! Go away! ~~~~
Axel: Oh, ouch, you really hit me where it hurt- right in the pit of my nonexistent heart...

Character: You really ARE weird! Leave me alone!

Axel: Tch. You're no fun. (dejected Axel leaves, scene end)


--------#3. Please don’t eat me! I don’t taste good even with ketchup!! --------

Axel: You seriously think I'd eat you?

Character: Wh-well, y-you sure seemed serious!

Axel: Heheh. You're kinda cute. Listen kid, I won't eat you, at least not today.

Character: You're mocking me.... (sigh)

Axel: C'mon. We're gonna be late for class, shorty. Better hurry up.

Character: Sh-sh-SHORTY?! UGH! (scene end or continuation?)

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<--- is so pale ghosts see her and say "DAMN THAT'S A PALE B*TCH"

Dwarven Vow # 351: If a man wears pink or purple, he is not to be trusted.

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